Thursday, 3 May 2012

Chapter 4

This chapter is more dramatic then any of the others. Hope you still like it :) Please tell me on how I can improve

Robbie was driving in his Porche, he was being fairly careful as he doesn't have a drivers licence. He couldn't have felt worse about himself, ever! He just got so angry with himself and unfortunatly Jason was standing too close.
'Oh God, Jason!' Robbie shouted as his thoughts came to him about the harm that he could have done. He knew it was a fairly hard punch. With that, he did an illegal 'U' turn and headed back to Gary's
'Shit!' he shouted as he didn't realise the police were there as he disturbed the traffic.
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'Where has Jay got to?' Susie wondered.
'Knowing him, helping Howard out.' Gary said hugging Chandra around the waist.
'Or, maybe he went for a cigarette?' Chandra suggested.
'He shouldn't have' said Susie 'I've told him to quit, he's been doing so well.'
Susie then ran outside to find him.

'What are we doing?' Mark said to Sofie after they'd finished kissing.
'What do you mean?' she asked 'I thought...'
'Yeah, I know, but I don't know if I'm over Ciara.'
Sofie sat back and felt herself start to cry, she didn't want to be hurt again.
'Hey, I didn't mean to upset you.' he said and realised what he had done, in a way he always loved Sofie, but loved Ciara more.
'Look' He carried on, 'Ciara hurt me, as Robbie did you but, in someways I love you, did abit when I was with Ciara.'
Sofie looked at him, Mark's eyes were almost as red as hers. She sat up and kissed him softly.

Howard was bright red, he really liked Chloe and he hoped she did too.
'Fancy a drink?' she asked
'Any kind of beer thats there please.' Howard replied sounding like a gentleman. He would have got them himself, but he needed time to sort himself out and think about his feelings.
Just then a loud scream came from the garden.
Sofie and Mark jumped at the sound and Howard looked up startled. Chandra, Gary and Chloe came running into the main room as silence and worry filled it.
'What was that?' Chandra shouted, worrying, but she got no reply.
'Shit!' Gary shouted 'Where's Susie?'
Everyone looked around nerviously, worried, scared all like:
'What the hell should I do?!'
Nearly everyone ran outside, only to find Susie kneeling on the floor crying to Jason's body.
'JAY!' Howard shouted 'Someone phone an ambulance now!' he also ran up to Jason and kneeled to see if he was ok.
'Mate, please be ok, wake up PLEASE!' He said starting to cry.
Chandra was ringing 999, shaking partly with fright. Sofie was hugging her, tring to calm her down, but she wasn't much good as she was also shaking.
Mark ran up to Howard and pulled him off Jason
'Mark get off!'
'No, come on mate, leave him.'
'Why, what are you going to do with him?'
'The ambulance will be here soon, leave him with Susie, he might come around if we give him space.' Mark said trying to calm him down.
'No!' Howard fought himself out of Mark. Gary then grabbed him and held him back as he is the strongest out of all of them. Mark kneelt beside Susie comforting her. Everyone at this point was crying, scared stiff.

5 minutes later the ambulance arrived and they carried Jason into it with Susie also.
'Please, please let me go too?' Howard begged.
'Sorry, one person only.' said a member of the ambulance crew.
'Come on How.' Mark said putting his hand on his shoulder. 'We'll follow in the car an wait for aslong as we need.'
Just then Robbie pulled up on the drive and ran to the ambulance. Everyone was shocked at why Robbie was there.
'What do you want?' Mark asked in deep tone.
'I came back to see if J...'
'W-what do you mean "You came back?"' Howard said on the edge of becoming angry. Robbie just stood there speechless, knowing that Jason didn't come back to conciousness to tell them.
'It was you!' Gary shouted, 'You knocked Jay out!'
Everyone was shocked and looked at Robbie in disgust.
'You!' Howard shouted 'I hate you!'
He ran and pushed Robbie against the wall. Gary grabbed him again.
'I can't believe you!' Sofie shouted in horror.
'Please, it wasn't meant to be this, I saw you and Mark and got angry, unfortunatly Jason got too close.'
Everyone just stood still, in the freezing crisp air. By this time the ambulance drove away.
'Some bloody birthday!' Mark said sarcasticly.

1 hour later, Robbie, Mark, Gary, Howard, Chloe, Chandra and Sofie were waiting outside Jason's room, they were all listning to Robbie.
'What should we tell the doctors?' Chandra asked.
'Whatever Jay wants to tell them.' Robbie said nervously.
Just then the doctor came out of Jason's room.
'Jason is now awake.' he said, 'First he wants to talk to a Mr Williams?'
Everyones happy face, turned into worry as everyone stared at Robbie leaving.
'I wonder where Gary and Chloe went?' Sofie wondered.
'To get a coffee.' Chandra replied.
Actually, Chloe and Gary were outside the cafe not getting a coffee.
'So happy we're back together.' Chloe said while kissing him.
'After 29 years.' Gary smiled
'Too long.'
They carried on kissing.